橄欖球隊長遲來的青春期
Peter是一個很有特點的孩子，如果是先看孩子的文書，可能會覺得一個青春期遲來的事情有什麼可多說的呢，一個關於乳牙什麼時候換完的細節有必要費這麼多筆墨么？但是如果注意到孩子的背景是高四階段（美國高中四年制度）是棒球隊和橄欖球隊兩個球隊的隊長的時候，就會明白這晚來的青春期是在多麼短的時間當中使孩子產生了多麼巨大的蛻變，這篇文書的選材是多麼的新穎。文書當中不乏幽默的寫法，讓人讀起來輕鬆愉快。這才是一篇成功的文書，不矯情，不彆扭，讀起來不覺得喘不過氣。這個孩子在GPA不高（美國高中GPA多不是4.0滿分），標化成績不高的情況下被他所申請的九所學校全部錄取，這和孩子作為兩個球隊的隊長和積极參与學校活動以及這篇文書是密不可分的。
姓名：Peter Dean
背景：在高中時代，Peter到了畢業年級既是棒球隊也是橄欖球隊的隊長。他四年高中階段都參與學生會，是學校執行委員會的成員。
SAT：閱讀650數學690
SAT2：美國歷史600數學680
GPA：3.90
高中：美高
申請學校：
√DavidsonCollege
√GettysburgCollege
√RhodesCollege
√Universityof Virginia
√ValparaisoUniversity
√VanderbiltUniversity
√WakeForest University
√Washingtonand Lee University
√Wheaton College(IL)
文書：
Common Application:Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, or risk that you have taken and its impact on you.
No underarm hair, no facial hair, baby fat, and a mouthfulof baby teeth is how I spent my first two years at James Madison High School.In the middle of my sophomore year, when most of my peers and begun shaving, Iwas getting the last of my baby teeth removed, because at age 16, I had 「themouth of a 12 year old,」 my dentist told me.
My older brother was big, strong, mature, and only a yearahead of me. Therefore, I was continuously asked, 「what happened to you?」 I alwaystried to answer the question optimistically-as I tried to do with the question,「do you shave your legs?」 After long anticipation, Mr. Puberty finally arrived atthe end of my sophomore year. Since that time I have grown at least eightinches, lost my baby fat, gained some underarm hair, and become the startingquarterback on the Varsity football team. Starting my senior year I can nowlook back and appreciate the lessons I learned before puberty, and I am gladthat puberty did take so long.
Delayed puberty helped build my character. It taught me a lotabout humility. In the halls during my freshman and sophomore years I wasalways looking up to, or being pushed around by, everyone. Now that I am biggerthan most of my peers, I do not feel that I am better than they are. Lackingappearance, size and strength I was also forced to develop other charactertraits such as friendliness, a sense of humor, and kindness to attractfriends-especially those of the opposite sex.
Delayed puberty eliminates many worries that usually areassociated with entering high school. In the morning I did not need to shave,because the peach fuzz was still sparse. I did not worry about my wisdom teethhaving to come out, because I had just lost all my baby teeth. I did not needto worry about braces, because I was on pace to get them in graduate school. Idid not have to worry about any girl problems, because I learned fromexperience that girls are not interested in guys that remind them of theiryounger brothers.
Delayed puberty also postponed and shortened my adolescentconflicts with my parents. Of course, I have tormented my parents with pettyarguments about use the car and curfew. However, my adolescence has beenefficient. My brother tortured them for four full years, but I achieved the sameresults in a few short months.
As I look back on my pre-puberty days there are many reasonswhy I am glad Mr. Puberty visited me late. I realize that there is no way tocontrol when he comes, but if he ever chooses to visit you later than yourpeers you should be thankful. Even though you might spend a few years on the 「short」end of jokes, in the end it will only make you better.
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