拿下MIT斯坦福，包攬7所常青藤，讓14所頂尖名校爭著錄取她的竟然是因為……

她申請了14所美國大學，收到了14封錄取通知。這14封錄取通知分別來自哈佛大學、普林斯頓大學、布朗大學、哥倫比亞大學、斯坦福大學、芝加哥大學、賓夕法尼亞大學、麻省理工學院、西北大學、萊斯大學、約翰霍普金斯大學、華盛頓大學、佛羅里達大學、邁阿密大學。

這些大學其中任意一所發來錄取都是值得開心的事，何況是14所全部給了yes。她SAT分數2330，GPA4.5，排名Top1%，體育方面有游泳、跳水、水球運動；課外活動經歷豐富，除此之外，這篇寫童年經歷的文書功不可沒。

她告訴美國商業內幕網站（Business Insider），最初她不想寫這麼私人的東西，她原本寫的essay是關於之前參加過的暑期項目的海報展經歷，講述的是自己如何變得不那麼內向害羞。但是之後她覺得這篇文書並沒有展示自己的真誠，因為在她看來，她原本寫的這篇文書是迎合招生官的喜好的。

還好，她換了故事。

Ultimately, she wrote about her more personal experience, and it certainly paid off. In addition to Harvard, she gained acceptances to Brown University, UChicago, Columbia, The University of Florida, Johns Hopkins, the University of Miami, MIT, Northwestern, UPenn, Princeton, Rice University, Stanford, and WashU.

來，一起看看這篇優秀的文書：

Four boys stood above me on a pile of garbage. Their words, "Bota, bota, matava" — "chubby", "fatty" suffocated me:

A familiar sensation of frustration and hurt gripped me. Looking for defense I only saw a cinderblock at my feet, impossible for my eight year old body to heave, so, I screamed in English:

"You are just jealous that you are poor and I am American!"

As the words flew out of my mouth, I knew I was wrong — there was no sense of triumphant satisfaction. I abruptly turned and ran into the refuge of my aunt s home.

Upon finishing a tearful narrative to my aunt and father, I preferred the comfort of the former s arms. I avoided my father s disappointment: I knew as well as he did, that I was not the victim.

Later, my hysteria subdued and guilt temporarily forgotten, I ventured outside to explore the crevices of Antananarivo. The boys were still playing atop the rubbish, then seeing me, scrambled off their mountain and ran in the opposite direction.

It s okay, I thought, I wouldn t be a fan of me either.

As I began walking up the street, I heard shouts:

"Wait, wait!"

The boys caught up to me and proudly waved hundred ariary bills in my face. In their broken English, they said in earnest and without malice,

"Look! We are not poor! We have money! We are Amreekan too!"

I agreed they were right and smiled sadly: one US dollar was the equivalent to seven thousand Malagasy ariary.

I was made sharply aware of what separated me from these children: oceans, experience, money. Politics, ignorance, the apathy of millions. Ironically, it was also the first time I belonged to my "motherland". I could share in the simple joy of relishing what "is", be proud of the sense of resourcefulness engendered by scarcity.

This memory has woven itself into my philosophy and my dreams. The very personal knowledge that millions live in a way such that electric toothbrushes are an unfathomable luxury (my cousin, Aina), has given me the following personal rules:

Education is an opportunity, not a burden;

You always have enough to share.

While I may not be certain of my future, I know for certain that I want to serve. I realize that service is as important an aspect of education as is academic work. I know this passion will follow me throughout my life and manifest itself in my actions at Harvard. This memory is a mandate to serve indiscriminately and without prejudice towards those I work with. I am all the more willing to cooperate to bring improvement to the community within the College and beyond the campus. I can bring innovation in problem solving born out of the deep desire to help others. I work for these boys, for all the proud Malagasy (and even those who are not proud to be Malagasy), and the children who cherish "what is" instead of mourning "what could be".

好文書是能創造申請奇蹟的。

本文轉載自美國留學快報

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